catlover

Sunday, April 09, 2006

At 4/09/2006 2:05 PM, snowboarding_chick said…

I think it is so cool that I can adio post but I think my story is stupid!
At 4/09/2006 2:41 PM, Kendle said…

Don't get discorged! Beginnings are allways a little awkward. You move really fast in the story, maybe you should describe the characters and their personalitys a little more . It is good so far.
At 4/11/2006 3:21 PM, snowboarding_chick said…

Thanks Kendle I will try that
At 4/11/2006 8:41 PM, Kendle said…

Cool!(This is Kendle)New name and pic. You like?
At 4/12/2006 7:46 PM, snowboarding_chick said…

Ya really cool!
At 4/14/2006 8:09 PM, Kendle said…

Thanks!
At 5/31/2006 4:26 PM, Captain Whitney said…

I actually liked the beginning. I do think you should explain the girls a little more- and maybe the parents? How old is Samantha- or did you mention? I'd check- but I'm too lazy. Only other problems I noticed were a few either gramatical mistakes (nothing compared to what I usually have in rough drafts) and a few things that I would reword. You should e-mail me the rest of the story. Call me sometime soon & I'll give you my e-mail address- if you want to e it to me. So, I like what I've heared! Kendle's right, beginnings are sometimes awkward- usually actually.
So that was really long and wordy and boring- so I'm going to go now, unless you've all fallen asleep...
At 6/01/2006 11:05 AM, snowboarding_chick said…

thanks but that is all I have written so as soon as I write more I will tell you.